In a lonely park I sit upon a bench waiting for your meeting to end. For duty to once again be satisfied.
While there I happen to notice a beautiful kite flying upon the wind. Within its brightly colored patterns I see myself… bobbing and weaving… caught up in a comforting embrace it danced in a joyous freedom.
Entranced I watched… soon I became aware of a small figure in control of the kite. His blue eyes lit up in the joy he felt… his small fists clutched tightly upon his beautiful treasure.
Suddenly out of nowhere a burst of wind came and the kite found his freedom dancing away seeminly unaware of the pain its sudden departure would cause…
Startled I felt your warm hand upon my arm. My lifeline… so solid and true. Tying me firmly with love.
to me that seems to mean that u dont have a solid life to cling to, and u need one, as well as a ryme sceem. their not necessary but they make a poem esier to read
met many and cockyyyyy.
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Wow, I love how you related it to real life. And no, you do not need rhyme. In my opinion, and those of many others, rhyme can be good if it fits the poem and subject and the poet can do it without making it feel forced.
I do have a suggestion, however.
I think that you should separate the little paragraphs into verses and break them up into lines. This will just make it seem more like a poem, if you know what I mean.
Nice work and keep on writing!
met many and cockyyyyy.
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like this one too
Rhymes are not needed —
Fly on the wind, float on the breeze
Ride the flow, its twists and turns
Dart back and forth, whipped by a gust
Long for a gale, a distant landing
All for a sycamore seed seeking rebirth
met many and cockyyyyy.
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