Do you like this poem? The form is Dorsimbra…?

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Time

Upon my watch, three hands tell me the time,
The mirror shows a different degree,
Forgotten thoughts with words that do not rhyme,
Meander down the road to lunacy.

Shine your shoes up!
Put on your tie!
Let’s go outside…
And find a place to fly!

Come and gone for me to see, believed,
The ocean tides, rivers wide, crimson sky,
How will I know when God has called to me?
Upon my watch, three hands tell me the time.

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Marg…I stretch the rukes and the iambs as far as they go…I can speak in penta…with some artistry…
Yes…Destinations was another Dorsimbra

5 Responses to Do you like this poem? The form is Dorsimbra…?

  1. I like it very much. The flow of the poem with it’s long stanza, quick stanza, and the long again creates a very interesting and rhythm. I especially like the way it ends as it begins. It gives the poem a definite sense of closure. The poem itself very good too. Is this the same form as Destinations?

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  2. Yes, I like it. And you’ve inspired me. I shall attempt my first Dorsimbra. But, I am getting confused with the syllable count. I will have to study it further. Or am I getting hung up on the wrong emphasis?

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  3. New one on me!
    Dorsimbra?
    My spell check.
    My dictionary.
    My Thesaurus.
    Don’t have it.
    The Y/A spell check flags it as a misspelling.
    Clue me in buddy.

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  4. Your artistry outdoes me, even when you stretch a bit in places. Keep it up and keep posting. How about some new challenges? a couple of us haven’t tried Dorsimbras yet.
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